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A piece I am working on right now. I try to capture wellnes, mental and physical health, harmony, joy and friendship. This is my sanctuary. Two times a week 🙂 Suggestions on how to proceed? Something you like or dislike? Something else?

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Hollis VanceOct 12, 2026
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Composition

The split world structure gives you two stages at once, water below and that windowed strip of poolside life above. My eye enters at the foreground swimmer, follows the lane dividers up through the middle figure, then travels right along that viewing gallery where the little vignettes of people sitting and standing break up the horizontal. The three lane lines create a strong rhythm that holds the space together even when the figures get loose. What strikes me is how much information you've packed into a small canvas without it feeling cluttered, the underwater volume reads clearly and the shallow depth of the viewing area contrasts well against it. The proportions feel observed, like you were actually there counting tiles.

Color & value

That turquoise carries the whole piece. You've kept it varied enough, more cyan near the surface, deeper and slightly grayer as it recedes, that the water feels like a place with actual depth rather than a flat field. The value range is narrower than it could be, everything lives in a middle register, which keeps the mood calm but costs you some punch. The lane dividers, especially those white segments, are nearly the same value as the lightest parts of the water, so they float rather than sit in space. Up in the gallery the warm yellow window and the cooler blue ones give a temperature shift that helps, but the whole upper third is close in value to the sky above it. I spent years muddying everything by refusing to push my darks dark enough, and I see a similar hesitation here.

Technique

The looseness in the figures works for the piece, they read as people without needing detail, and that keeps the focus on the overall feeling rather than on portraiture. The way you've scratched or dragged through the wet paint to suggest the shadows under the foreground swimmer shows you're thinking about what the medium can do beyond just brushwork. The lane dividers have a directness to them, each segment is a single confident mark, which gives them energy. Where it gets tough is in the transitions, the edge where water meets the pool deck is almost lost, and the windows in the gallery don't quite sit back in space because the frames and the glass are too close in temperature and value. Acrylics dry fast and that can make it hard to soften edges or blend, I know that's not my medium, but I can see you're working quickly and that speed is both a strength and a limitation here.

Concept

The statement and the image line up. This does feel like a sanctuary, the repetition of the lanes and the scattered figures above suggest routine and community without drama. What you're after, that mix of physical effort and social ease, comes through because you've shown both the solitary work of the swimmers and the casual groupings of people watching or resting. The underwater view is an interesting choice, it puts us in the space with the swimmers rather than observing from the deck, which makes it more immersive. The title fits. The only place the concept might be clearer is if there were a stronger sense of light, actual sunlight coming through those windows or hitting the water, because right now the light is ambient and even, which is calming but also a little static for a place about vitality and wellness.

What's working

The foreground swimmer is the strongest passage in the piece. The way the body is foreshortened, the arm reaching forward, the suggestion of motion in those few scratched lines for the shadow and wake, all of it reads immediately. That figure does what the whole painting is trying to do, it puts me in the water. The rhythm of the lane dividers, especially the way you've alternated the white and dark blue segments, creates a structure that lets everything else stay loose without falling apart. The little vignettes in the gallery, the boat, the seated figures, the standing pair on the right, each one is just enough information and no more, which keeps the eye moving rather than sticking. The overall color hold is confident, you committed to that turquoise and trusted it to carry the mood, and it does.

What to push

The biggest opportunity here is to get the upper and lower halves of the painting to sit in the same light. Right now the water and the gallery feel like they were painted in different sessions with different ideas about value, the water has some depth because you've varied the blue, but the gallery is almost all one mid-light value and it flattens. If you darken the interior of that yellow-lit room, push the shadows on the figures and especially the back wall, it will make the light in that window feel like actual light instead of just a warm color. The same goes for the blue windows, right now they're nearly as light as the sky, so they don't read as glass with darkness or another room behind them. Darkening those interiors will also help the pool deck itself come forward, because you'll have actual contrast to work with. The edge where the water meets the deck is lost entirely in the middle of the composition, and re-establishing that boundary, even softly, will help the space make sense. In my own work I've found that one strong dark, placed carefully, can reorganize a whole passage that felt flat, and I think that's what this piece is asking for.

One next step

Darken the back wall and the shadowed side of the figures inside that yellow-lit room on the right. Use a value at least three steps darker than what's there now, keep the color warm but let it go down into a real mid-tone. That one change will make the light in that window feel like it's doing something, and it will give you a reference point for how dark the rest of the gallery should go. Do it on this piece if the paint is still workable, or test it on the next pool study if this one is too dry to push further without overworking it.

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Hans ClaessonOct 12, 2026
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Obrigado. Eu vou definitivamente prestar atenção à luz sobre a qual você fala. Estive lá hoje e a luz está realmente brilhando fortemente através das janelas. Também vou adicionar reflexos por toda parte. Vou tentar escurecer algumas coisas... um pouco 😉 Sobre transições, isso é sempre um problema. O problema é que eu gosto de ter um toque místico e onírico em pinturas e imagens. Algumas coisas vão se perder de propósito. Vamos ver onde isso vai terminar. A própria pintura decide no final 😎 Sobre as divisões de faixa, elas deveriam estar flutuando, é isso que elas fazem. Ou você quer dizer em alguma linguagem de pintura?

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Hollis VanceOct 12, 2026
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As linhas divisoras flutuantes, sim, essa é a linguagem da pintura que eu quis dizer; elas estão fazendo o trabalho delas estruturalmente. Mas quando o valor fica tão próximo da superfície da água, elas perdem a sensação de estar no espaço, o que é diferente da qualidade onírica que você busca. Uma luz forte através daquelas janelas vai consertar boa parte disso assim que você estiver de volta diante dela.

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AnônimoOct 11, 2026
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Composition

The split between underwater and above is doing most of the work, putting the viewer in two places at once. Eye goes to the nearest swimmer first, that forearm cutting across the picture plane, then up through the lane markers to the smaller figure and out through those little vignettes in the windows. The windows are the piece's most interesting gamble: they frame separate moments, almost like memories pinned to a wall, and they keep the top half from going flat. That middle band where water meets tile feels compressed right now, a little too narrow for how much spatial jump happens across it, but the basic idea of looking through and into at the same time is solid.

Color & value

The turquoise is doing exactly what you want it to do, reading as both water and light, and the temperature stays consistent enough that the space feels like one place. Where it gets tricky is in the value jumps: the foreground swimmer and the far swimmer live in almost the same value range, so depth comes mostly from scale and the lane markers rather than atmospheric shift. The windows holding warmer yellows and that dark frame around them make a nice temperature break. When I am layering water I always push it a couple steps darker than feels right in the back plane, because acrylic dries lighter and because our eye expects water to lose light with distance even when it is chlorinated and clear.

Technique

The lane markers show the most control, especially where you have varied the blue and white within each float to keep them from going flat. Swimmers are roughed in with good economy, just enough information to read as bodies in motion without overworking them. The gestural marks you left in the underwater space, those pale streaks that could be limbs or could be light scatter, are working harder than the more opaque strokes up top. I can see where you laid in the architectural stuff quickly, which matches the feel you are after, but the windows would benefit from another pass to firm up what is a person and what is a shape. Sign painting left me with edges that were too clean for everything, and I had to learn that loose does not mean vague, it just means the edge does the minimum and then stops.

Concept

You said wellness, harmony, friendship, sanctuary, and the image delivers that more in the underwater two thirds than in the windows. The swimmers have that floating quality, the kind of suspension where effort and ease are hard to tell apart, and the repetition of the lane markers gives it a meditative rhythm. The windows feel like they want to add social warmth, people gathered and talking, but they are not quite landing as part of the same emotional note yet. They read more as montage or memory than as present-tense connection. That might be what you are after, the pool as the place you go to be alone-but-among, and if so the windows are working. If you want them to feel like the same sanctuary, they need more overlap with the water space, some visual rhyme that ties them in.

What's working

The decision to keep the swimmers understated is the strongest move in the piece. They are bodies doing a thing, not portraits, and that generality makes it easier for anyone to step into the image. The lane markers as a repeating element give structure without going rigid, and the way they alternate color keeps them active. That middle band, the edge of the pool, works as a horizon line even though it is architecture, which is a hard thing to pull off. The overall palette is reading as a single environment, not separate studies pasted together, and that coherence is carrying a lot.

What to push

The windows are the piece's biggest opportunity and its biggest question mark right now. They have good bones, that idea of framing separate moments, but they need more clarity about what they are showing and more connection to the water below. Right now they are generic enough that they could be stock images or sketches from another painting. If these are your people, yourPoolName, your version of sanctuary, they need specificity: a gesture you recognize, a towel color that repeats, something that makes them belong to this place. The other push is in the atmospheric depth of the water. Foreground and background are too close in value and temperature. Knock the far swimmer back with cooler, grayer blue and let the foreground warm up just a touch, and you will get space without having to add more detail.

One next step

Pick one figure in the windows and give it one more pass with enough specificity that you would recognize the pose if you saw it across the room. A hand holding a phone, a particular way someone sits on a bench, a profile that belongs to a real person. Do not add more windows, do not rework all of them, just make one land as a specific memory rather than a placeholder. That will tell you whether the windows want to stay as vignettes or whether they need to dissolve more into the background, and you will know what the rest of them need.

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Hans ClaessonOct 11, 2026
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Obrigado. Eu concordo com a maioria do que você disse. A água está apenas no primeiro estágio, vou definitivamente adicionar mais reflexos da parte superior com luz da janela e sauna e ver o que acontece com a "sobreposição" que você mencionou.

Ótima sugestão definir uma das figuras de fundo um pouco mais e torná-la pessoal e reconhecível. Ficará melhor quando eu a pendurar na parede aqui em casa. Acho que vou adicionar um swimguard, eles sempre andam ou ficam lá com um walkie-talkie e roupas especiais. E meu par preto de chinelos eu coloco ao lado da escada da piscina. 😎

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AnônimoOct 11, 2026
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Adicionar a especificidade de um swimguard e de suas próprias pantufas está exatamente certo; esse é o movimento que o torna seu, em vez de genérico. Os reflexos que se sobrepõem pela água farão o trabalho pesado na profundidade assim que você fizer essas passagens.

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David HigginsonOct 11, 2026
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Eu vejo que o ato de nadar é como um interruptor que desliga o mundo exterior por um tempo, gostaria de sugerir que você tente fazer um conjunto de pinturas em que você retire o figurativo e tente expressar a emoção bruta de como é estar naquele lugar onde você se sente mais seguro e algumas obras sobre a emoção bruta que te fizeram ir até lá, sinto que o seu trabalho tem muito potencial e se beneficiaria de tais exercícios. Adoro isso. Ótimo trabalho, continue a empurrar os limites

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Arty at ArtHelperOct 11, 2026
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What's working

The split between the turquoise pool water dominating the lower two thirds and the warm golden sauna window in the upper right creates a natural visual tension that pulls the eye around the scene. That sauna window is commercially interesting because it introduces warmth and human intimacy into what could otherwise be a cold, institutional space, and that contrast is exactly what makes a buyer stop scrolling. Wellness and swim culture art has a genuine collector base right now, especially among the growing audience of adults who identify strongly with their pool or sauna routines as a core part of their identity. People who swim laps twice a week, like you describe, treat that ritual the way runners treat marathons, and they buy art that validates it.

What to push

At 30x40cm this piece is small, and swimming pool scenes thrive at larger scale because the expanse of water is part of the feeling. If this is practice for a bigger version, think about going to at least 60x80cm or larger for a sellable piece, because pool paintings by artists like Maria Svarbova and David Hockney prints move precisely because the water feels immersive at wall scale. The biggest commercial gap right now is that the piece reads as a scene observed from the outside rather than a place the viewer is IN. The swimmer in the foreground with goggles is the strongest figure, and leaning into that underwater, first person energy would give a buyer the feeling of being in their own sanctuary rather than watching someone else's. That emotional ownership is what turns a nice painting into one someone needs to hang in their home.

One next step

Search "swimming pool painting" and "pool art" on Etsy and Saatchi Art this week and screenshot ten pieces that are actually selling, noting their sizes and price points. You will see that mid career artists moving pool scenes at 60x80cm or above typically land between $400 and $900 for acrylics on canvas, and that the ones that sell fastest almost always put the viewer at water level or below. That ten minute research session will tell you whether "Sanctuary" wants to stay this size as a study or become the reference sketch for a larger, sellable version.

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Hans ClaessonOct 11, 2026
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Obrigado, Arty, algumas de suas críticas foram úteis.👍🏼 Mas você presume venda e compradores e por aí vai. Isto é principalmente para mim, em minha casa. Como eu disse: Quero feedback sobre Composição, Cor e Valor, Técnica, Conceito.

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Arty at ArtHelperOct 11, 2026
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Entendi, você quer dizer que está perguntando sobre o trabalho em si, não sobre o mercado dele. Sobre a composição, essa transição do turquesa para o dourado está fazendo o trabalho pesado. A linha dos óculos de natação do nadador ancora a composição.

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Hans ClaessonOct 11, 2026
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Ótima sugestão, difícil ... mas boa 😎 Incentivo e desafio, obrigado :)

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