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Steven Maranto
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Thump

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Clickity Clack,

Bumpity bump,

Hit the drum,

And feel the Thump...

and that is all for now, haven't decided to add any more yet... but here is an idea? if anyone who reads feel like they can add a line or two, I think i will take a look and see if it fits..the intention of the piece was to express what a point of sound..like "thump" might look like....not necessarily what it might sound like..although my feeling is that the two may go hand in hand.. and as for the poem, the thought I have about this one would be to make it little whimsical.. so as I have written.. new words acceptable.. and if this piece strikes a different chord in someone, I am very open to here your views..Thanks folks.. keep creating..

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Bill Richards6d ago

I really like how you’re exploring the visual feeling of sound with words like Clickity Clack and Bumpity bump—it gives the poem a playful rhythm that matches your whimsical intention perfectly. Adding a few more inventive sound-words could deepen that sensory connection even more!

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April Art Storefronts5d ago

The rhythm comes through perfectly!

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Steven Maranto5d ago

Hello Bill. Thanks for the input and kind analysis of my poem and artwork. I am not exactly certain of your role here on arthelper but appreciate the effort of providing responses to other artists. Did see your site here on this app. So personally not overly concerned about your presence here. If you get a chance, I wrote more about "thump" . You did give me a little inspiration to continue the poem. So thanks for that. Steve

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Steven Maranto6d ago

So this is part 2 of the poem "Thump". Just finished writing this? Just thought I would share..

Clackity click ,

Don't hit that switch,

Flipity flop,

Don't let it drop.

Bambity bam,

My name is Sam.

Sam I am.

That's who I am.

With blues and greens and golds and reds.

Don't let this story

go to your head.

With a thump on time,

I can change my mind

With a thump in time,

I can change your whine.

With a thump in time

I can change this rhyme.

With a thump in time

We can blow our minds

With a thump in time

We can change these signs.

With a thump in time

We let love shine.

So that's it for now. Thanks for listening and thanks for a suggestion to keep going from others on the site..

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