Batida

I really like how you’re exploring the visual feeling of sound with words like Clickity Clack and Bumpity bump—it gives the poem a playful rhythm that matches your whimsical intention perfectly. Adding a few more inventive sound-words could deepen that sensory connection even more!

The rhythm comes through perfectly!

Hello Bill. Thanks for the input and kind analysis of my poem and artwork. I am not exactly certain of your role here on arthelper but appreciate the effort of providing responses to other artists. Did see your site here on this app. So personally not overly concerned about your presence here. If you get a chance, I wrote more about "thump" . You did give me a little inspiration to continue the poem. So thanks for that. Steve

So this is part 2 of the poem "Thump". Just finished writing this? Just thought I would share..

Clackity click ,

Don't hit that switch,

Flipity flop,

Don't let it drop.

Bambity bam,

My name is Sam.

Sam I am.

That's who I am.

With blues and greens and golds and reds.

Don't let this story

go to your head.

With a thump on time,

I can change my mind

With a thump in time,

I can change your whine.

With a thump in time

I can change this rhyme.

With a thump in time

We can blow our minds

With a thump in time

We can change these signs.

With a thump in time

We let love shine.

So that's it for now. Thanks for listening and thanks for a suggestion to keep going from others on the site..